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Roleplay Classes « Thread Started on Jan 20, 2007, 2:55pm »
Teachers: D.ream S.lip I.ce Eragon
Students: (Don't be ashamed, be glad! ) Sarvana Selena
Offers:
-If you wish to be a teacher, then please apply with the form I shall post. -For a "student", please post one of your best posts, and tell us what you don't like about it. -Then, either me or S.lip I.ce, Eragon will get on and see if we can help you. -If you don't know what's wrong, but you just want to get better, then let us know!
Aisling and Kalah l Cydee l Bryer l Murtagh and Thorn l I've trained with the worst Yet the only one who can compete with me is Galbatorix My skills are unlimited I can't control my feelings for the one and only Elin
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #1 on Jan 20, 2007, 2:59pm »
Teacher Form:
Name: Why you want to be a teacher: (At least 2 paragrahs, 4 setences) How long you've been RPing anywhere: Post your BEST post from anywhere. (preferably from here though): Anything Else?:
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[b]Name:[/b] [b]Why you want to be a teacher:[/b] [b]How long you've been RPing:[/b] [b]Post your best post:[/b] [b]Anything else?:[/b]
Aisling and Kalah l Cydee l Bryer l Murtagh and Thorn l I've trained with the worst Yet the only one who can compete with me is Galbatorix My skills are unlimited I can't control my feelings for the one and only Elin
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #2 on Jan 20, 2007, 3:01pm »
Student Form:
Name: Why you want to be a student: How long you've been RPing: Your usual post: Anything else?:
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] [b]Why you want to be a student:[/b] [b]How long you've been RPing:[/b] [b]Your usual post(s):[/b] [b]Anything else?:[/b]
Aisling and Kalah l Cydee l Bryer l Murtagh and Thorn l I've trained with the worst Yet the only one who can compete with me is Galbatorix My skills are unlimited I can't control my feelings for the one and only Elin
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #3 on Jan 20, 2007, 3:01pm »
Aisling and Kalah l Cydee l Bryer l Murtagh and Thorn l I've trained with the worst Yet the only one who can compete with me is Galbatorix My skills are unlimited I can't control my feelings for the one and only Elin
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #4 on Jan 20, 2007, 3:04pm »
Name: Sarvana Why you want to be a student: im a really sucky rper How long you've been RPing: 2 years Your usual post(s): you two know me.... but ill post one if you wish Anything else?: nopers work your magic
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #5 on Jan 20, 2007, 5:41pm »
-warms up hands- All right, first off, what I mainly noticed in your posts, are some spelling errors. Mind you, we're all not perfect. (And, I shall be a bit mean in here, but out...I'll be different. Because I luff ya too much! )
First off: -Always re-read through your post, at least scanning through it for mistakes. (I always do this) -Details
Here's where the hard part comes in:
Secondly, if your character is in a forest, why not give some details about the sounds, creatures and what your character sees. Such as, if my elf is in a forest, instead of just stating it in once sentence. Look here:
A quiet night in the forest soothed many people - while it frightened others. Unlike this elf, he wasn't frightened of this soothing darkness engulfing the surrounding trees. Barely moving, he became one with the animals hiding in the darkness and shadows around him. His light-colored eyes scanned about him, to spot rabbits, horses, foxes, and other various animals. Shifting, he spun around, as he heard footsteps. But - all it was, was his sister. He grinned innocently towards her, his pale white skin in contrast to her darker shade, tanned skin. He was sometimes called "The White Shadow", due to his albino-hued skin, and matching ivory-hued hair.
See that. ^ That's just a bit of a paragraph. I described the surroundings of the forest around my elf, and also coming across his sister, another silvery-haired elf.
Thirdly: -Thoughts -Feelings -Description of the character -Character's friend (equine, animal, etc.) -DETAILS
As stated above, detail are very handy, but can get WAY out of hand. I know some people on an equine RPGame, and they have like...8 paragraphs, all description of the character, and their feelings and thoughts. That's boring, have details, but not too many.
Aisling and Kalah l Cydee l Bryer l Murtagh and Thorn l I've trained with the worst Yet the only one who can compete with me is Galbatorix My skills are unlimited I can't control my feelings for the one and only Elin
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #6 on Jan 20, 2007, 5:45pm »
If you wish, this would help me out a bit. If you could try this strategy first, with a full-fledged post, I would love to keep helping you, seeing what more you might need to work on.
I am taking muse into an accountance. For - my posts suck when my muse disappears. xP
Mind you, I actually taught myself to be the best RPer I am today. I had no help, and I stumbled across RPing games from another game, sort of, VirtualPups.
Aisling and Kalah l Cydee l Bryer l Murtagh and Thorn l I've trained with the worst Yet the only one who can compete with me is Galbatorix My skills are unlimited I can't control my feelings for the one and only Elin
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #7 on Jan 20, 2007, 5:49pm »
Name: Eragon
Why you want to be a teacher: I would really like to be a teacher because I myself was quite bad at rping when I first started and my longest posts were only like 1 or 2 lines, but since then because of the help of a teacher on a different site I have come a long way and now (on days where i have muse, which i have not had latey because of the flu) I can write posts of very good length and description, also i have disxela or however it's spelt and I know whot it's like to be a bad rper cos of a learning problem and stuff.
I want to help people who are not as good at rping as others to get better so that one day they shall maybe be helping others who need there help.
How long you've been RPing: 2 years
Post your best post:
It was a cold winter day. The moon was still in the sky but soon it was to be replaced with the shinning sun. The trees swayed from side to side as the strong wind blew. There was freshly fallen snow on the ground that covered the golden sands. It had been a long days travelling for Robin before he had finally got here. Although in Robin’s heart he knew that there was darkness in there, and that darkness gave him power that he him self could not understand. Robin had never lost a fight and he knew that was because of the darkness, but there was a also some good in his heart, not much good, but some. Robin had come upon the desert 5 days ago and he had been living here since then without the leaders knowing. But now, it was time to announce his presence, and to become king. Robin had fallen in love with the Magical Desert the first moment he stepped on to it. Robin used to take refuge on the edge of island but now he decided that he should travel to the centre of the island so that he could have other equine company.
Robin was without a doubt one of most handsome stallions you would ever see. His arched neck and proud head gave him the look of a true leader, and his long pillars gave him size and speed, Robin was also very fast, he could out run almost anything even a returning tide which is said to come faster than a galloping horse. Also Robin had wisdom, he had been in many wars and he had come back with many scars but with his scars came the knowledge that no one must know. Robin was not proud of the fact that he had been in many wars, nor the fact that he had lived while so many of his friends and family had died. Also Robin had done something that he wish upon no horse not even his worst enemy, he had cradled his love, his friends, and even his family in his pillars while they had took there last breaths.
When Robin had come back from the war, he had seen too much and that seemed to distant him self from the world. Robin had thought that his heart would never mend after seeing so much death, but now he knew that the last memories of war in his mind where never going to go away he decided that he must stop wasting his time to see if he could mend his heart from the sights he had seen, and he knew that he never could so know he thought that it was time to get on with his life.
The scars that Robin had been left with where both metal and physical, but the scars that everyone could see did not take away from his handsome good looks, no. If anything they added to them a great deal. Robin knew that all the vixen liked him and they thought he was handsome, but he did not care much for those vixens, since he had cradled his mate in his pillars as she took her dieing breath he had never really cared for another mate. However if he was to ever change his mind he knew that he would not have a problem finding a knew mate. Robin’s optic clouded with grief, his heart begun to sink and he no longer knew if he could make this challenge or not, If war had taught him one thing it was to avoid fighting when possible, but Robin knew that he had to make the challenge for he could never live under the command of another.
Maybe war had torn at his heart at his heart, but Robin knew he could never ruin the life another so for one feeble moment he knew that he had to turn and walk away. But Robin looked back on the Desert and he walked and he saw what his life would be like if all this was behind him, it would be full of more battles and maybe even his death, then he saw what it would be like if he stayed here to make it his own, but he saw what it would be like under the rule of another and the thought but him of even more, Robin would not let the thought of challenging enter his mind, he knew that it was wrong and could ruin the lives of the former leads.
Once again Robin closed his optics as the sight of his dieing family and his friends and his one true love. He new that where ever he was fighting was a part of life, it was the part that he wanted to get away from but he knew that he couldn’t, so he let out a almighty battle cry. I Robin challenge the leaders to a challenge for this here Magical Desert.
What had he done? Robin had just done the thing that he said he would never do, he had just arranged a fight when he didn’t have too. The thought came to Robin as a bird goes to a tree. He could never fight even though he had made the battle cry, the thought of another battle was unbearable. Robin looked around, he could tell that there where not many herd member left now, he had been here for five days and he knew that in his heart this was where he belonged. The stallion moved forward he steps, he was leaving now, but then something stopped him, wheatear it was his pride and dignity he did not know, but he knew something, he had to stay and accept the fight if the leader accepted his challenge.
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David the ebon painted stallion had been away from his home lands for so long now. He had left when he had split up with Rose and then he and Desire had a fight with each other, so David had just left. He had been gone for just over a year now. He had had time to think about what he had done and now he had returned.
Rose's parting word echoed in his mind. I shall never take you back...... David optics begun to water and the thought of what he had done on that day. What had come over him, even in his own war days he had never acted like that, like a a a spoilt equine. No. David had always been friendly so what happened on that day. Of course David knew.
He was young and he had met with Desire for the first time when she had said she loved him, it had been exiting and for a young horse excitement was wonderful, but even if he was in shook and wonder why did he say what he did about his daughter and his one true love, oh that was another thing. Love, how could he call Rose his one true love, after all she probably hated him for everything he had done, and he couldn't blame her, he hated himself too.
David had been travelling for a long time know, he had almost forgotten the way to his old home, his kingdom. No not even Rose could deny him of that, his kingdom. The desert he had fought so hard to gain and protect, and know his legacy of king was over. When he desert was under his reign it was a golden age for the desert and it dwellers.
David however knew that there would probably be another king reigning over his terrain, and that Rose would probably be long gone from the magical desert. David knew that he would have to fight hard to get them both back, well he did not care for the desert as much as Rose so the desert he could live without. But Carlotta Rose, he would never be able to live with out her.
There it was the desert. It was in sight, he could just see the outline of where the sand started and where it finished, David lowered his dial and he begun to gallop. His pillars moving as fast as anything you have ever seen before, if you looked at them for too long they would become a blur. His harks flickered back and forth, and his neck stretched in an effort to give him more speed.
David slowed him self to a fast trot as he entered the terrain. He breathed in all the familiar scents, but then he could smell something he barely remembered from his youth, oh he could remember the equine well it was just his scent that he had all but forgotten. David slowed to a walk and he forgot all the other scent new and old and even Rose’s. David followed the scent of his old buddy. Robin.
Soon David could see three equines standing talking to each other, two of them he could recognize and he knew quite well but the other she was knew, and he had no idea who she was. Rose. David could see her, she had not changed much at all, her beauty was there and her words where as fiery as ever. Half of David wanted to shout out to her, but the other half told him not to. After all he loved her but did she still even like him in the smallest way.
Then David’s optics moved one and he could see Robin. Robin’s good looks where still there and his friends handsome buckskin face had obviously attracted the attention of the new vixen, and although David knew it he did not what to admit it that it had also caught Rose’s eye.
David moved forward he was standing jut behind Rose. Luckily the wind was in his favour and so they couldn’t smell him, and David had also been very quite when he walked up behind Rose so no one should have heard him.
He knew that the new vixen would not e able to see him in her line of vision and Rose would not be able to see him behind her, he doubted that Robin would see him either but Robin would surely enough be able to sense the presence of his old friend David.
Robin lowered his dial, he could not hear any words been spoken by either of the two wonderful vixens but he could sense the tension in the air that hung between Rose ad Lilly. Robin looked up and at once he begun to stare in Rose direction, it would look to her like he was staring at he, but he wasn’t, no, he was looking at his old friend David.
Robin’s mind went flying back to the days when he and David where foals, and when they would run around racing each other, then his mind went to the war, the war that now haunted Robin like a ghost, then he remembered how he and David had been separated. Robin mind lingered on the thoughts of war for a while longer before he gave in and his mind took him back to the terrible place.
Robin awoke to the sound of the birds singing there little songs apply to the world. He yawned and he stood up. The young horse knew that today was day he would be heading of to the war, and although that was not until nightfall that he had to leave he had woken early. His mate Devils Kiss had been away for the night visiting her sister and her sister's knew born colt. Robin decided he would go and find her. On his way to finding her he met up with his Dad. "Son Devil is by the stream." Robin nodded and thanked his Dad then set of for the stream.
Soon he reached the stream and he spotted his mate. Devil had also spotted him and had started to trot up to him. "Robin please don't go to war today. stay here with me"
Devil I must go, you know that.
Robin nuzzled his mate and said goodbye before he had to leave to start his day training for the war. And that, that was the last time he would see his mate while she was still healthy and live again, but he did not know that the next time he would see her was when she would be dieing.
Robin opened his optics and he would not let him self think any more one the subject of war, for he knew only too well this next memory would be of his mate dieing, and him crying so hard for his lost love.
Robin’s optics still stared blankly in Rose’s direction, until at last he found the silence too hard to bare he spoke. Robin did not know if his friend wanted his presence to be given away, but Robin had to speak purely out of shock.
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #8 on Jan 20, 2007, 5:51pm »
Very good, Eragon! I know about that, dyslexia, one of my very good friends, whose on only another site, has it. She makes it through, especially using the spell check sometimes.
But, otherwise, I think your posts were awesome. ^_^
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #9 on Jan 20, 2007, 5:52pm »
And your name is added to the list of teachers. I might make one for students, just to help keep track.
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #12 on Jan 21, 2007, 2:12pm »
Name: Selena Why you want to be a student: To improve my rather rubbish rping skills with talented tutors. How long you've been RPing: About over a year..almost two years. Your usual post(s):You know...if you need one just tell meh. Anything else?: nope
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #13 on Jan 21, 2007, 2:33pm »
ACCEPTED
Well - like I said with Sarvana, you could probably post more with the surroundings. Overall, your details are quite good, but surroundings, and feelings are what you could work on.
Otherwise, I don't think you need to work on this that much. Besides, through your posts with me, you are pretty good, but I think:
-Surroundings -Thoughts -Feelings
Just a bit more, and I think you got it. If you could, post here or somewhere practicing this, but make sure to let one of us know!
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Re: Roleplay Classes « Reply #14 on May 2, 2007, 4:23pm »
Name: Firerush Why you want to be a student: I seriously need to improve my posting abilities, I used to be really good but now, well every day seems to be a bad day How long you've been RPing: about a year Your usual post(s): Running, running, running... Now where to go, yells and screams echoeing through her head. Soon she comes to her mount and yanks herself onto his back, urging him away from everything. She comes to a wall of urgals and spins her horse around only to find she's surronded. She pushes her leg on until her horse is at a gallop, then leans foward as he sails over an urgal who had beant down to get an arrow. She urges her horse faster yet not a thought runs through her terrified mind. A leather bag is cluched to her waist, oh why had she grabbed the egg from the kings castle? They ride away, through forests but the yelling never ceases from behind her, always coming closer to her tirering mount... Anything else?: I know what I'm soppused to do but I need someone to kick me into gear
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